“If everything around seems dark, look again, you may be the light.” - Rumi By the time I got off the phone with Hamilton, I was feeling even more anxious with frustration, incredulity, and outrage added to the mix. It was the kind of toxic emotional cocktail that used to trigger my drinking binges and was coursing through my bloodstream like a straight shot of tequila. I was not amused by the analogy my mind had made. “Once an alcoholic, always an alcoholic,” I muttered as I unfolded my legs from the the chair and got to my feet. My body was stiff from all the sitting and Bentley was letting me know it was time for a potty break. A quick glance at the beside clock on the dresser told me more than two hours had passed. Almost three since Evan left. With any luck he’d have reached town by now and was talking to
Sometimes it’s nearly a little too much information but at the same time it needs to be visual
I found perhaps two tiny typos,
At the end of the chapter reread the conversation Maddy has
I think there’s something about ‘tell them ‘ where auto correct may have misfired
And way earlier at the depiction of the tree supporting the tree house, I think it is ‘surrounded by’ but there’s then nothing surrounding it, just tiny thing…
I am never sure how much detail to give as so much of what I am writing about is not common knowledge - like the round window or how to focus a pirate’s spyglass. I am aware I am making my readers work ;-)
Great catch in he last sentence - thank you. As for the trees, here is the sentence: “The tree itself was surrounded by and almost indistinguishable from its neighbors in the forest.” Is it not clear that the neighbors are other trees?
Oh details are essential for anything touching the Cherokees , it is more where sometimes you show the moves that Maddy makes perhaps could be condensed more ?
But perhaps also it’s because my mind is racing and wants to know more of what is ahead. So I think it’s a personal thing.
You know teenagers would be a very interested audience too …
I love how the tension is building leading towards the ultimate turning point. Like Maddy, you leave the reader in suspense with questions begging for answers. Interesting piece about the answering machine and Faith perhaps being the one who found D.
Whoa Jena …. This is wild. One gets really worried about Maddy 😳
But is it believable, Flo? Can you step into her world and “be” with her?
Yes I can totally
Sometimes it’s nearly a little too much information but at the same time it needs to be visual
I found perhaps two tiny typos,
At the end of the chapter reread the conversation Maddy has
I think there’s something about ‘tell them ‘ where auto correct may have misfired
And way earlier at the depiction of the tree supporting the tree house, I think it is ‘surrounded by’ but there’s then nothing surrounding it, just tiny thing…
I am never sure how much detail to give as so much of what I am writing about is not common knowledge - like the round window or how to focus a pirate’s spyglass. I am aware I am making my readers work ;-)
Great catch in he last sentence - thank you. As for the trees, here is the sentence: “The tree itself was surrounded by and almost indistinguishable from its neighbors in the forest.” Is it not clear that the neighbors are other trees?
You know I think it works in fact, lol
Oh details are essential for anything touching the Cherokees , it is more where sometimes you show the moves that Maddy makes perhaps could be condensed more ?
But perhaps also it’s because my mind is racing and wants to know more of what is ahead. So I think it’s a personal thing.
You know teenagers would be a very interested audience too …
I love how the tension is building leading towards the ultimate turning point. Like Maddy, you leave the reader in suspense with questions begging for answers. Interesting piece about the answering machine and Faith perhaps being the one who found D.
Powerful! Absolutely powerful.
Thank you so much!